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Hello !
For most people it was but a rotten marsh..
But for me, it was a land full of riches!
After years of work, we finally dominated nature!
By taking down trees and mining in the depths..
We were determined to explore, driven to fight and destined to conquer!
We have built New-Avignon with our bare hands, a civilization built to our imagination.
After countless hours of toil, the industrial machine was launched.
We have gathered all the forces we can.
We created guns, rifles, and cannons!
For the first time, Indians and Outlaws smelled the smell of gunpowder !
We defended our values on many battlefields.
Oftentimes we won, other times we lost.
But we never lost our will !
So.. This is the story of my people..
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ok thank you very much =)
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Yeah that would work.
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Oh and when using "..." use three periods instead of two.
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"serveur" spelled wrong, it must be spelled "server"
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Oh yeah I saw that but forgot to mention it.
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Everything's now solved, just need jak2131 or Lunick to lock this thread, never seen a thread got solved within minutes
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wow, i didn't even see this until it was solved, that rarely happens
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Pretty good. Don't start sentences with but or by, (ex. other times we lost, but we never lost our will!). Don't put spaces before question marks and exclamation points, and (I'm not sure how other people would put it) I would say just often instead of oftentimes. Other than that, it seems great.